As the years go on and technology becomes more and more advanced, many people believe that computers should replace teachers at school. They claim that students will be taught better and faster with the computer as their "teacher".
I don’t think that it is a good idea. Computers can be very effective, they can teach the student faster than a human teacher would do, but they can't do the most important thing: to encourage the student to develop creative thinking. Students have to be taught how to be creative and the computer can't do it because machines can't teach how to be creative, so if a computer replaces the teacher, the students won't learn how to think outside the box.
In addition, when the student makes a mistake, the teacher should correct him and explain to him how to get the right answer. That way, he gains confidence and knows what he should do. If a computer has to correct a mistake, it will show the correct answer without giving an explanation or encouraging the student to do better with a smile.
To sum up, I don’t think that a computer can or should replace a human teacher. A computer can't encourage students to be able to think creatively and can't help them get the confidence that they need in order to succeed.
Not bad, but, surprisingly, there quite a few grammar mistakes. Please correct your work.
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Daphna
Wednesday, December 1, 2010
Wednesday, November 3, 2010
Young Drivers
Every day we hear about accidents which involve young drivers. Most of the drivers drink alcohol and then drive, so they are less concentrated on the road and the chances for an accident increases.The young drivers say that they are too young to make the right decisions so no one should blame them. An organization of accident victims has recently proposed that the age for getting a driver's license should be raised to 19. I don't think it is a good idea.
I don't think there is a huge difference between the age of 17 and 19. I think that when someone has reached the age of seventeen he is mature enough to understand the risks on the road. Moreover, this decision won't be effective since young people at the age of 19 drink alcholol too before they drive, so there won't be any difference and it won't reduce the amount of accidents.
I suggest a new law, which forces the young drivers to be more careful on the road.They will be forced to take a 30 day course, which will teach them to be more responsible, and the risks of drinking and then driving. At the end of the course they will be tested and they will have to pass the test in order to be able to get their license.
To sum up, I don't think it will be a good idea to increase the age of getting a driver's license to 19 because there won't be any difference. But if the purpose is to reduce the amount of accidents, the new rule that I suggested will be effective.
Very good work.
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Daphna
I don't think there is a huge difference between the age of 17 and 19. I think that when someone has reached the age of seventeen he is mature enough to understand the risks on the road. Moreover, this decision won't be effective since young people at the age of 19 drink alcholol too before they drive, so there won't be any difference and it won't reduce the amount of accidents.
I suggest a new law, which forces the young drivers to be more careful on the road.They will be forced to take a 30 day course, which will teach them to be more responsible, and the risks of drinking and then driving. At the end of the course they will be tested and they will have to pass the test in order to be able to get their license.
To sum up, I don't think it will be a good idea to increase the age of getting a driver's license to 19 because there won't be any difference. But if the purpose is to reduce the amount of accidents, the new rule that I suggested will be effective.
Very good work.
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Daphna
Tuesday, October 19, 2010
The Internet
"The Internet has changed our lives". This is what we hear almost every day. Today, in the technology age, people can't live without the computer and especially without the Internet. Most of the people in the world use the Internet every day, and it is the most powerful source that the world has to offer.
The Internet has a lot of advantages. It has a lot of information in it, so if you are looking for something, you will get all the information that you want. For example, I had to prepare an English project about Kobe Bryant, and most of the information came from the Internet. Another advantage of the internet is that you don't have to leave your home in order to use it. It is very easy to use, so, in fact, it is the best source.
However, the Internet has some disadvantages. The first is the fact that the Internet is addictive. It has so much to offer, therefore you feel like you have to be there for hours each day. Then you have no time for sports or even hang out with friends. So, it damages your body and your social life. Another disadvantage is that the people who use the Internet are exposed to all kind of bad information, like pornography and other people, who want to take advantage of them. For example, my friend met a guy on the Internet, they met in real life and the guy was a delinquent, who robbed my friend.
To conclude, The Internet has so many advantages and disadvantages. You can find so much information and it can better your life. I think that people should use the Internet, but they should be careful and play on the Internet no more than 3 hours per day, so they have time to exercise and meet their friends.
This is much better.
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Daphna
The Internet has a lot of advantages. It has a lot of information in it, so if you are looking for something, you will get all the information that you want. For example, I had to prepare an English project about Kobe Bryant, and most of the information came from the Internet. Another advantage of the internet is that you don't have to leave your home in order to use it. It is very easy to use, so, in fact, it is the best source.
However, the Internet has some disadvantages. The first is the fact that the Internet is addictive. It has so much to offer, therefore you feel like you have to be there for hours each day. Then you have no time for sports or even hang out with friends. So, it damages your body and your social life. Another disadvantage is that the people who use the Internet are exposed to all kind of bad information, like pornography and other people, who want to take advantage of them. For example, my friend met a guy on the Internet, they met in real life and the guy was a delinquent, who robbed my friend.
To conclude, The Internet has so many advantages and disadvantages. You can find so much information and it can better your life. I think that people should use the Internet, but they should be careful and play on the Internet no more than 3 hours per day, so they have time to exercise and meet their friends.
This is much better.
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Daphna
Saturday, September 18, 2010
Settle Conflicts Peacefully
These days, most of the children use violence in order to settle their conflicts. I believe that children should be taught to settle their conflicts peacefully and not use violence, and I will suggest two ways of doing that.
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First, the teachers or the parents of the kid should take part in this and explain why the kid should not use violence and how bad it could be for him. The responsible adult should teach the kid how to solve his problems by talking and not by using violence.
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In addition, I suggest the schools run a new program that will encourage children to behave properly by giving them a prize or an award when they settle their conflicts peacefully. With this program both sides will be happy and the problem will be solved.
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To sum up, the children should be taught to settle their conflicts peacefully by their parents and their teachers. If the parents encourage them to do so, and to be satisfied with the results, they will realize in which way they should choose.
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Daphna
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First, the teachers or the parents of the kid should take part in this and explain why the kid should not use violence and how bad it could be for him. The responsible adult should teach the kid how to solve his problems by talking and not by using violence.
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In addition, I suggest the schools run a new program that will encourage children to behave properly by giving them a prize or an award when they settle their conflicts peacefully. With this program both sides will be happy and the problem will be solved.
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To sum up, the children should be taught to settle their conflicts peacefully by their parents and their teachers. If the parents encourage them to do so, and to be satisfied with the results, they will realize in which way they should choose.
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Daphna
Students' Knowledge
Many students say that the Bagrut exams are the most reliable way of testing a student's knowledge. I must say that I don't support their opinion. I think that the Bagrut exams are not the most reliable way of testing the student's knowledge.
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In my opinion, many students tend to fail the Bagrut exams because of the pressure. We all know that the Bagrut's grade is the most important thing in school. At the end of the day, the university will take a look at the Bagrut's grade and then decide whether to accept him or not and this fact makes students panic before the exam and then their grade is not what it was supposed to be.
In addition, the amount of material in the exams is huge, so most of the students don't have enough time to learn it and then they are not perfectly prepared for the test. Sometimes even the level studied in class doesn't match with the level of the Bagrut and then the student feel that the exam was not fair and they have to repeat it.
I suggest that the teachers give the students more challenging homework and tasks and then value their work. Another way is to see how the students handle the teacher's test.
To sum up, I don't think that the Bagrut exam is the most reliable way of testing a student's knowledge, and I hope that the teachers test the students differently, in order to figure what is the real knowledge of the student.
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This is better. Good work.
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Daphna
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In my opinion, many students tend to fail the Bagrut exams because of the pressure. We all know that the Bagrut's grade is the most important thing in school. At the end of the day, the university will take a look at the Bagrut's grade and then decide whether to accept him or not and this fact makes students panic before the exam and then their grade is not what it was supposed to be.
In addition, the amount of material in the exams is huge, so most of the students don't have enough time to learn it and then they are not perfectly prepared for the test. Sometimes even the level studied in class doesn't match with the level of the Bagrut and then the student feel that the exam was not fair and they have to repeat it.
I suggest that the teachers give the students more challenging homework and tasks and then value their work. Another way is to see how the students handle the teacher's test.
To sum up, I don't think that the Bagrut exam is the most reliable way of testing a student's knowledge, and I hope that the teachers test the students differently, in order to figure what is the real knowledge of the student.
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This is better. Good work.
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Daphna
Thursday, April 29, 2010
Application for studies
10 Soget Street
Holon
July, 28.2010
Harvard University
Fifth Kenndy Avenue
Harvardm NY
USA
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter because I am interested in studying for a degree. Since I have heard that your university offers the best course in economy, I decided to choose you.
I am 25 years old and I am intersted in economy. Since you are the only university in the state that offers the best course at the most convenient price, and since all my friends are studying here, I decided that I want to study here too.
The subject that I would like to study is economy. I took one course in economy while I was in Israel. Therefore, I have a basic knowledge in this subject.
I would be grateful if you could send me more information about this course.
Thank you for your assistance, I look forward to your reply and I hope we will meet again soon at the university.
Very truly yours,
Ravid Mazon.
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Daphna
Holon
July, 28.2010
Harvard University
Fifth Kenndy Avenue
Harvardm NY
USA
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am writing this letter because I am interested in studying for a degree. Since I have heard that your university offers the best course in economy, I decided to choose you.
I am 25 years old and I am intersted in economy. Since you are the only university in the state that offers the best course at the most convenient price, and since all my friends are studying here, I decided that I want to study here too.
The subject that I would like to study is economy. I took one course in economy while I was in Israel. Therefore, I have a basic knowledge in this subject.
I would be grateful if you could send me more information about this course.
Thank you for your assistance, I look forward to your reply and I hope we will meet again soon at the university.
Very truly yours,
Ravid Mazon.
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Daphna
Wednesday, April 14, 2010
requesting information
25 Soget Street
Holon
April 14, 2010
Manager
"See the World" Travel Agency
Fifth Kenndy Avenue
New York
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am 22 years old and I am really interested in going on a vacation to New York. Since I have heard that your travel agency is the best in the business, I chose you and I would like to ask some questions about the trip.
During my trip, I would like to walk around the city, enjoy the activities it has to offer, and maybe go to a basketball game, since I love the N.B.A. Moreover, I would like to have a car and drive around the city, Especially to Times Square.
I would like to request information about the trip. First of all, how much does it cost? and where is the hotel located?, is it in the center of NY or far from the center?. Also, I would like to know more about the transportation in the city.
I look forward to your reply. I hope you will send it soon because I can't wait to go to New York and have a great time.
Very Truly yours,
Tony Hawk.
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Daphna
Holon
April 14, 2010
Manager
"See the World" Travel Agency
Fifth Kenndy Avenue
New York
Dear Sir/Madam,
I am 22 years old and I am really interested in going on a vacation to New York. Since I have heard that your travel agency is the best in the business, I chose you and I would like to ask some questions about the trip.
During my trip, I would like to walk around the city, enjoy the activities it has to offer, and maybe go to a basketball game, since I love the N.B.A. Moreover, I would like to have a car and drive around the city, Especially to Times Square.
I would like to request information about the trip. First of all, how much does it cost? and where is the hotel located?, is it in the center of NY or far from the center?. Also, I would like to know more about the transportation in the city.
I look forward to your reply. I hope you will send it soon because I can't wait to go to New York and have a great time.
Very Truly yours,
Tony Hawk.
(90)
Daphna
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